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by wrangler
Tue May 06, 2014 8:32 am
Forum: Fiction
Topic: What it means to give and not recieve Chapters 1 and 2
Replies: 4
Views: 7932

Re: What it means to give and not recieve Chapters 1 and 2

Well I didn't really mind whatever grammar errors there might have been, and white space or paragraph indentations weren't a problem for me. Overall I enjoyed the story. You could probably save yourself a lot of effort though if you left out the details of every mundane action undertaken by the cha...
by wrangler
Tue May 06, 2014 8:27 am
Forum: Fiction
Topic: What it means to give and not recieve Chapters 1 and 2
Replies: 4
Views: 7932

Re: What it means to give and not recieve Chapters 1 and 2

This story seems to have some promise, but...as written, it is much too hard to read. With all of the spelling and grammar errors, run-on sentences, inappropriate verb-tense shifts and lack of white space (paragraph breaks) I got bored less than 1/2 way through this first installment. It was almost...
by wrangler
Mon Apr 28, 2014 7:51 am
Forum: Fiction
Topic: re What it means to give and not recieve
Replies: 1
Views: 3174

re What it means to give and not recieve

It appears that the word spoon was somehow changed to noops when I copied and pasted the story here, I reread a few of the chapters and spotted it so if you come across noops it supposed to be spoon. I know they are a few other typos and grammar problems I thought I caught most of them before postin...
by wrangler
Sun Apr 27, 2014 8:23 am
Forum: Fiction
Topic: What It Means to Give and Not Receive Chapter 9 and 10
Replies: 1
Views: 4851

What It Means to Give and Not Receive Chapter 9 and 10

Chapter 9 An Embarrassing Day “Glen its 6:30 time for you to get up and make breakfast.” “Janet, what are saying, make breakfast.” “That’s right you’re mom told me you know how to cook can make a great omelet and you know your way around a kitchen, so get to it.” “Yes Janet Sweetie, can I use the re...
by wrangler
Sun Apr 27, 2014 8:21 am
Forum: Fiction
Topic: What It Means to Give and Not Receive Chapter 8
Replies: 0
Views: 3292

What It Means to Give and Not Receive Chapter 8

Chapter 8 Unlock Day Arrives I woke up the next morning as the sun hits my eyes, Jan’s not here and the clock says 7:30. I get up and head to the bathroom and do my morning duties and brush my teeth. I still have the speedos on. The women think I look silly in speedos, but say I’m cute when wearing ...
by wrangler
Sun Apr 27, 2014 8:19 am
Forum: Fiction
Topic: What It Means to Give and Not Receive Chapter 7
Replies: 0
Views: 3325

What It Means to Give and Not Receive Chapter 7

Chapter 7 Joyce Comes Clean Sort of. I wake up at six with my arm still around her and my shoulder and arm are sore. I roll over and get out of bed and go take my morning piss. I come back to bed with her waiting for me. “Morning Sweetie, sleep well?” “I was until you woke me up, but that’s ok you c...
by wrangler
Sun Apr 27, 2014 8:16 am
Forum: Fiction
Topic: What It Means to Give and Not Receive Chapter 5 and 6
Replies: 0
Views: 3500

What It Means to Give and Not Receive Chapter 5 and 6

Chapter 5 Nothing Like Confusion Alarm goes off at 6:30. Shit another day at work. Day went as usual, file this, get that. No one noticed anything different about me, the bulge barely showed and then only when standing in a certain way. I used the stalls for peeing. It did seem to become less notice...
by wrangler
Sun Apr 27, 2014 8:14 am
Forum: Fiction
Topic: What It Means to Give and Not Receive Chapter 4
Replies: 0
Views: 3420

What It Means to Give and Not Receive Chapter 4

Chapter 4 The Training Begins I'm lead up the steps and she stops at the bathroom tells me she needs to freshen up, and why don't I go and turn the bed down, and light the candles she set out. I agree, seems like a good way to start the nights events anyways. I'm sitting on the edge of the bed when ...
by wrangler
Sun Apr 27, 2014 8:12 am
Forum: Fiction
Topic: What It Means to Give and Not Receive Chapter 3
Replies: 0
Views: 3925

What It Means to Give and Not Receive Chapter 3

Looks like my chapters are to long to be posted so It will be posted with less chapters each. Chapter 3 The Adjustment Time. What the hell just happened and what have I agreed to. I get dressed and walk to the front counter. Joan hands me a packet and tells me everything I need to know about the Fid...
by wrangler
Sun Apr 27, 2014 8:06 am
Forum: Fiction
Topic: What it means to give and not recieve Chapters 1 and 2
Replies: 4
Views: 7932

What it means to give and not recieve Chapters 1 and 2

This will be posted in 5 parts 2 chapters each. This is my first story that I actually put any time into. Hope you enjoy it, comments either good or bad will be appreciated. What It Means to Give and Not Receive Chapter 1 Chance Encounter It was three weeks into summer vacation and I not being a gre...